New "Story"

There is something that I have been writing for about a couple days now, and I am totally committed to it. It is a script. Now, I don't exactly know what the script is for. The format is set the where it's kind of like a T.V. show. And it is completely rough draft, unfinished. It leaves off at a totally un-reliable spot. Even though I am sure I will get numerous amounts of critism (heck, never mind, no one ever comments anyway) at this UN-POLISHED script, I want to share it with you anyway. I think some of the concept is okay, but I need more opinions and ideas on how to make it better.

*Please do not take this script without any permission. I just don't want people using my writing, even if it's not that good.*



Thanks!


Chelisa